The article The net is the real world shows us that the net brings out the realness in people if your not careful and especially with people you think you know.
The net is the real world by Jake Simms and Larry Magid is about how one college student Tyler Clementi ,who askes his colleagues for some private time in their dorm till midnight. His request was granted but not his privacy of his roommates had secretly placed a webcam that showed Tyler made out with another guy and was leaked out into the internet .Tyler found out about his roommates stunt and was devastated that he posted a goodbye post on his facebook status and jumped off a bridge into the river where he was discovered dead the following day.”The internet shows tons of graphics of people doing things they wouldn’t do in person” states John Suler. Things that are on the net can ruin a person reputation. How far do we have to go to ask for a little bit of privacy that it’s even leaked onto the internet?
I believe as much as we wanted to have our own privacy we can’t have due to the people and their lack of respect. Now that the internet is more advance with technology anything can happened to anyone and anything. For instants webcams people can be turn them on and leave them on without noticing or they can use them to make threats or even farewell videos who ever decides to commit suicide or even in this case invasion of privacy.
Its funny how you get to know one person and as you try to trust them with anything or ask for a little favor they go behind you back and that’s when you feel like you been betrayed and might lead you to do something you wouldn’t think people would think? Tyler Clementi felted this. As much as this is a sad tragedy, we realize that privacy is never granted when it is asked for. It is either betrayed or exposed, little do we know maybe to the world.
As much as useful or fun the net might be it’s a cruel and dangerous world because of the people that don’t have consideration. We hackers, and c yberbullies that really have no respect for privacy or even respect for themselves for that matter that they go out of their own misery and destroy other people’s lives without noticing or just doing it as a prank and probably boredom.
Invasion of privacy is a huge issue now in days that we have to be careful with the people we talk to or where we are located. As for Tyler Clementi , he took his own life due to lack of privacy and as much as we think we know people and the internet plus technology, We really have no clue. It makes you think how much trust you have in a person don’t you?
I like how you kind of warned the readers to be cautious of letting their guard down around people. It is a good point you made that you can't always trust even the ones you know.
ReplyDeleteI recommend re-writting your summary because it's not clear. From reading your summary, I felt as if the article is not about a boy who commited suicide due to invasion of his privacy, but about asking him to get free room until midnight.
You must use punctuations, so your writing will be even clearer than it is now. Without them, the sentance seems boring and monotonous.
My name is michael and what i like about your paragraph is that you included many detail's pertaining why the internet is dangerous. You described the various activities that take place on the net such as cyberbullying, invasion of privacy and even threats. You where persuasive enough to make readers belive the internet can be dangerous. I agree that the internet is dangerous depending on how you operate it, and where you choose to browse, which make's your essay very understandable sary.
ReplyDeleteWhat i would recommend is while you are writing that you dont get carried away from the main point. You didnt get to carried away but you were almost routing to another direction. You described that you shouldn't trust friends because they can turn there back's on you. It happens occasionally just dont stay to long on that topic, Its great to be brief when you are describing.
What you must reconstruct is your grammar and punctuation sary, that can be very crucial in a graded writting, such as a writting rubric. They look for these common error's in writting's. So you must make sure when your write you look for error's in your writting. Proof read your work dont get carried away in your essay, and i think you will be a great writer.
I like how you started out with the summery, and than ended with the thesis and how you explained everything in details in the next paragraphs. The summary in the your own words is wonderful, that what I like most about your story like how you organize your writing in your own worlds, step by step. I like how your paper is written with few grammar/spelling/style errors. My question to you is "what will you do if this happened to you?"
ReplyDeleteI don’t recommend anything to add to your paper but the solution to the problem. You did a great job writing the paper.
You must, must, I don’t even know it seems that you have answer all the Summary Evaluation Checklist and Response Evaluation Checklist.